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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Tue Jan 19, 2016 12:00 am

Unproductive.

EDIT: YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS AFTER 2 MONTHS I FINALLY REACHED THE SECOND PAGE OMGGGGGGG this calls for a celebration.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Tue Jan 19, 2016 12:03 am

ubem wrote:Yes good point, construction and proportion are definitely more important than all else! I make the mistake of jumping ahead of myself sometimes, good thing you know to pace yourself. Especially since you want to be a comic book artist, I think you're on the right track focusing solely on construction/drawing for now whereas values are mostly simplified in comic art. Though one other thing, maybe make sure to focus on accuracy, especially with portraits, take twice as long if you need to. One good accurate drawing will help you improve more than twenty bad ones. It's also great you have self awareness of your mistakes, that and consistency of practice will take you very far!


Ah, that makes sense. I'll try to spend more time to make my portraits more accurate. I did notice I had this BAD habit of making my eyes big when doing realism.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Tue Jan 19, 2016 3:21 am

Couldn't sleep tonight so I did this.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Fri Jan 22, 2016 8:54 pm

Not much of an update. Been busy storyboarding for a short comic. This is the cover page.
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Re: My Junk

Postby crankshaft » Sun Jan 24, 2016 9:12 am

Nice work. Some critique: For Jan 19 the giant scythe feels unbalanced in terms of visual weight. I would re position it so that it's touching the ground plane so take some weight off it. Also in that position she must be grabbing the scythe pretty hard considering the weight. Also I think her left arm can be tilted down a bit. It feels stiff and uncomfortable with it being almost vertically up. For the most recent pic (not sure if it was intentional) but the hand and arm should be bigger since it's very close to us. I think the hand can benefit from being a bit lower. The arm can use the same treatment as the previous critique. Hope this helps.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Jan 25, 2016 1:33 am

I'm gonna put my comic on hiatus. In the mean time, I'm gonna try to learn how to draw eyes, PROPERLY.

I know I have issues with proportion/construction but due to boredom I'm gonna focus on features till the end of next month then resume proportions.

I'm gonna spend a week each on: eyes, hair, nose, mouth, and ears.

I was thinking of doing a "draw 100" challenge but I don't think that's particularly effective since it's better to focus on QUALITY than QUANTITY but i'm open to other opinions as well.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Jan 25, 2016 1:35 am

crankshaft wrote:Nice work. Some critique: For Jan 19 the giant scythe feels unbalanced in terms of visual weight. I would re position it so that it's touching the ground plane so take some weight off it. Also in that position she must be grabbing the scythe pretty hard considering the weight. Also I think her left arm can be tilted down a bit. It feels stiff and uncomfortable with it being almost vertically up. For the most recent pic (not sure if it was intentional) but the hand and arm should be bigger since it's very close to us. I think the hand can benefit from being a bit lower. The arm can use the same treatment as the previous critique. Hope this helps.



Thanks for the critique. I need to hurry up with my other stuff so I can learn to draw hands/arms properly.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Thu Jan 28, 2016 2:05 am

Focusing on eyes this week. Leggoo
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sat Jan 30, 2016 7:43 pm

Two portrait studies, rest are imagination.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Thu Feb 04, 2016 2:57 am

I been mostly practicing proportion and noses this week. It's still a struggle... arghhhhhhhhh
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Re: My Junk

Postby FISH » Thu Feb 04, 2016 9:05 am

these are lovely! I like that your style is consistent. I could recommend doing a little life drawing here and there? I think it'll boost up some of your observation skills which'll make the wrought studying a bit easier :)
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sat Feb 06, 2016 5:00 am

My figure drawing from imagination is starting to get okay. Of course, it won't be good till I've ready studied the anatomy and construction.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sat Feb 06, 2016 5:03 am

FISH wrote:these are lovely! I like that your style is consistent. I could recommend doing a little life drawing here and there? I think it'll boost up some of your observation skills which'll make the wrought studying a bit easier :)


Thanks! I do a lot of head sketches/doodles in class of my classmates, does that count?
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Feb 08, 2016 2:30 am

More stuff. Mainly practicing shapes and form. Feel free to critique anything.
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Re: My Junk

Postby crankshaft » Fri Feb 12, 2016 8:35 pm

Nice work. Some critique: On Feb 6, the second pic, the girl's arms seem too short. Also watch the contour lines going around those organic shapes. Particularly the long ones. Some of them are not wrapping around the forms as well as they should be. It also looks like you're not thinking in 3d and just "stickering" the lines on the forms. It is hard but try to remember foreshortening, what's closer and farther when doing those lines.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sat Feb 13, 2016 3:58 am

Been practicing hair this week. I think I improved a little bit? And yes, I know the hands are bad.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sat Feb 13, 2016 4:00 am

crankshaft wrote:Nice work. Some critique: On Feb 6, the second pic, the girl's arms seem too short. Also watch the contour lines going around those organic shapes. Particularly the long ones. Some of them are not wrapping around the forms as well as they should be. It also looks like you're not thinking in 3d and just "stickering" the lines on the forms. It is hard but try to remember foreshortening, what's closer and farther when doing those lines.


Thank you Crankshaft! I know those organic shapes are wrong but I don't know how to fix them :(... I'll be practicing them this weekend.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Feb 15, 2016 2:52 am

I practically spend the entire weekend drawing organic forms. I think I almost got it.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Fri Feb 19, 2016 11:06 am

Applying the form exercises to figures.
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Re: My Junk

Postby crankshaft » Sat Feb 20, 2016 1:59 pm

Nice work. These are showing improvement but they also need more structure. Try putting faint center lines and cross contour lines in your figures/faces. Also your line work is a bit "shaky." Try warming up on a blank canvas and just draw straight lines/curves connecting dots. You can also just zoom way out but that sort of defeats the purpose of the exercise because by then you'll be drawing with your wrist.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Wed Feb 24, 2016 2:30 am

So this week I did a self critique. Basically, one of my favorite artists redraw my character and I tried to figure out why his was so much better :O
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Wed Feb 24, 2016 2:32 am

crankshaft wrote:Nice work. These are showing improvement but they also need more structure. Try putting faint center lines and cross contour lines in your figures/faces. Also your line work is a bit "shaky." Try warming up on a blank canvas and just draw straight lines/curves connecting dots. You can also just zoom way out but that sort of defeats the purpose of the exercise because by then you'll be drawing with your wrist.


Thanks Crank! I'll try this exercise again. Hopefully, my line confidence improves.
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Sun Feb 28, 2016 8:18 am

you can only practice something for so long before you burnout so I'm done with heads and i'm now moving on to torsos
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Re: My Junk

Postby Will-Marton » Mon Feb 29, 2016 10:13 am

Hey, really liking the sketches and studies. They seem to be paying off. Keep it up! :D
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Thu Mar 03, 2016 4:11 am

More junk
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Thu Mar 03, 2016 4:12 am

Will-Marton wrote:Hey, really liking the sketches and studies. They seem to be paying off. Keep it up! :D


Thanks man, they better be >d
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Mar 14, 2016 12:40 am

Oops forgot to update hehe
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Re: My Junk

Postby Moe » Mon Mar 14, 2016 1:46 am

First attempt at mecha
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Re: My Junk

Postby sachsapne » Mon Mar 14, 2016 3:46 am

tackling head and hands yess. There are like some "landmarks" which if you get right give a feeling of depth in anatomy. like the collar bones which and shoulder muscles when connecting give a bump. Keep it up dude :D
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Re: My Junk

Postby Den matiel » Sat Mar 19, 2016 2:04 pm

nice sketchbook keep on posting i want to follow your progress, i can't help with guidance tough since i'm a noob in art ' ^^ so lets improve together :D
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