Can someone critique my sketch?

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Can someone critique my sketch?

Postby iza » Mon Oct 17, 2016 8:11 pm

I've been working on a commission and something about it has been bothering me, it looks off but I can't figure out why. I tried starting over and looked up a lot of references and this is the best I got so far. Can someone give me some advice?
Here is the initial sketch
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and what I have so far
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Any feedback is appreciated!
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Re: Can someone critique my sketch?

Postby Styxcolor » Thu Nov 24, 2016 10:52 am

I really like your work. The figures resulting from the sketch seem coherent to me and keep up the dynamics.
I can't find anything to criticize here ^^
The question is, what did you want to achieve?
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Re: Can someone critique my sketch?

Postby Ayyyy » Tue Jan 24, 2017 2:08 am

I think some energy from the initial gesture is lost in the final line work, which makes it look a bit clinical. I would exaggerate the curves of each figure for the final piece. Maybe add a background to create a setting or story for the piece. Looks good otherwise, are you going to render/paint it?
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